Writing Task2 Lecture 1

读懂题的重要性

Students easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. (can’t be replaced or substituted)

libraries的存在是否有必要的理解是错误的，这里的意思是libraries是否可以被替代

in many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. some people think that the government should have the responsibility. (Is it controllable)

政府的责任的理解也是错误的，问题在于这件事政府是否可控。

Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities.

What are the reasons(the direct basis for sth. happening?) Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

这里的问题是为什么

1.Grading Criteria

TR — Task Response

CC — Coherence & Cohesion

LR — Lexical Resource

GRA — Grammatical Range & Accuracy

she don’t love you 在雅思中并不会扣分，不阻碍交流（太好了）

在写作中其实最重要的是审题与逻辑，不跑题的情况下，连贯与否，其次是语言语法拼写是否影响交流。我的水平就是语言不行，逻辑也不行哈哈哈废了。

​ 5/5.5 语言还可以，但审题和逻辑不行

​ 6/6.5 语言还行，审题和逻辑也还行

​ 7+ 语言很棒（没有中式英语），审题和逻辑也很好

2. the rubric

give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

write at least 250 words. (quantity < quality)

persuasive language:

  1. Logis: reasoning! (最为重要 例如：抽烟会使焦油附着在肺泡–>身体分解焦油很慢甚至无法分解 –> 焦油致癌 –> 吸烟有害身体健康)
  2. Ethos: exemplification/facts/statistics/quote from experts (英国佬不信hhh)
  3. Pathos: emotion/appeal to fear, sympathy, patriotism

IELTS Writing Task 2:

A. only Logis

B. only Ethos ×

C. Logis + Ethos

D. any Pathos ×

P.s. 考官如何读你的作文（你考试时写作文的顺序）？

Body #1 —> Body #2 —> Conclusion/Introduction

3. Question Types

  1. Advantage & Disadvantage — 两边或一边倒都可以

    Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

    Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

    避免 Encyclopedia writing 清单式写作！

    • l Body #1: …has lots of benefits. First of all… Second… Third…
    • l Body #2: There are, however, some drawbacks. First… Also… Moreover…

    suggested structure

    • Introduction (抄一遍题目) : …

    • Body #1 (一个好处或者坏处): The main positive / negative impact that…has no society is …

    • Body #2 (一个好处或者坏处): Another … /However…

    • Conclusion (你的立场) :

      in conclusion …, I strongly believe that … because …

      OR

      like most things, I suspect that the truth is somewhere in the middle.

      OR

      …brings us…; however, we might have to worry about…

利弊题

Many people use social media every day to get in touch with other people and news events.（一个动作，分析这个动作的利弊后果！）这个动作删掉的话会影响句子的意思则是问题的关键。
Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

  • Body #1 = Topic sentence + Elaboration

    A. Topic sentence

    “硬条件”！

    a) You need to repeat the topic — as the ‘subject’ of the question

    b) Add a controlling idea that you will discuss in that paragraph

    As for individuals and society, the issue concerned by the majority of people is the invasion of privacy. 我们并不能分析出要讲什么 5分不能再多了

    ↓

    the use of social media will cause privacy invasion

    考官看到后会进行分析对第二段分析

    (Body #2 )The use of social media will also cause …, however …

    VS

    Privacy invasion will be caused by the use if social media.

    (Body #2) Privacy invasion will also be caused by…/could be tackled by the government with…

SVO — subject/verb/object

Subject? 你想跟别人聊的话题topic

VO? 你对这个话题的看法controlling ideas

主语去人化

考官：你认为mixed school（男女混校）好不好呀

考生：好的呀

考官：为什么呢

考生：Because in the mixed school, boys and girls communicate with each other, and this improves their skill of…【被考官打断】

考官：我想跟你聊混校，你为何跟我聊男生女生啊

考生：…

考官：你应该这样讲 — because the mixed school provides the opportunity for boys and girls to communicate, whereas the single-sex school can’t…

P.s.

Police carrying guns（配枪的警察 = Police that carries guns） is able to take the criminals effectively.

Police carrying guns（警察配枪这件事） is an effective deterrence for the criminals.

In the past, knowledge was stored in books,but now knowledge is stored on the Internet.

Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

With the development of internet many knowledges was stored on the internet. storing konwledge on the internet provices easy access to a wealth information, its a good way to extence their knowledges base and will creating a diverse society.

With the development of internet many knowledges was stored on the internet.A lot of information is like a flood, making people at loss. Not every konwledge stored on the internet was true that can be rely, readers must evaluate source carefully to makesure the information is believable.